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Comments for 'The Rebel: Battle of the Cobras'



Mainevent
5:29 pm | September 28, 2003
You don't have to put them in italics, just write them out fully and capitalize. Only italicize words like the names of ships.
Alpha Lance
3:03 pm | September 28, 2003
I thought it was good, but, if it isn't so much trouble, but could you put space between each paragraph. Also, when you list name and stuf, write them out in the paragraph, like, Cobra, Cougar, Grizzly, and Hawk.

Write it out like that, and also itlize it. So it will stick out and be more noticable.
GLADIATRRR3000
9:25 pm | September 27, 2003
ive read it
Elfster
11:56 am | September 27, 2003
I've been waiting for you to come back lol.

if you think this is good wait until you see the chapter of what happens to Gizim after halo, I think I put alot of nice spooky details in

i cant really show you know though...

By the way, I sent you an email a long time ago and you never responded. Did you get it? It doesnt matter if you do now, it was just a sorry note for dissing you and having you die in all the Weird Series of Events fan fics lol.

but I think since your probably one of the best critics on HBO, and better than any spellchecker ive ever seen *laughs* i was going to see what you think of some of my ideas for future chapters.
Hawk7886
11:42 am | September 27, 2003
I meant fire team :)

Also, I got first post ^^
Hawk7886
11:38 am | September 27, 2003
Wow. Just wow. Your stories have been steadily getting better and better. Kudos!

10/10

P.S.

"Cobra
Cougar
Grizzly
Hawk"

Am I an instructor? =P
Elfster
3:27 am | September 27, 2003
Damn... nobody commented at all... Do you think anyone has even read it?
Hawk7886
2:18 am | September 27, 2003
There. I found 'said story' and have posted what I think of as an "appropriate" response. Jeez, that's some cold, cold stuff.
Hawk7886
2:04 am | September 27, 2003
I got that transcript on the first. Sad thing is I didn't get working on it 'til the 20th O_x. I did send you the edited version, I'm not sure you got it, though.

Also, I love getting things before anyone else does, so anything you are willing to send me before you post them would make me very happy.

I just checked my mail and there is nothing there right now, but I'll check early Saturday morning or later tonight.

"Weird Series of Events?" I haven't heard of that. You killed me in a fan-fic?

Hawk7886
Elfster
12:02 am | September 27, 2003
And as for you being on a team well..

I had this idea that.... On second thought to say it I'd have to explain something that would give away The Rebel 3 and 4 so I'll just email it to you. Tell me if you get it.


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